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01-31-2007, 04:00 PM
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FRANCE! You're next.....
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I have not see snow for a long time... Mmmm hot chocolate... Marshmellows and whipped cream? A touch of nutmeg? Loving it... lol... Well again, thanks.. And I wish I could see the snow fall.
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02-01-2007, 03:59 PM
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at peace
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Hey there--
Read your document, and I must say I am waiting for the next page! Nice touch, the window looking out at the steeple. And of course, the seventeen candles....  Write on, Angel. InPeace, InLove |
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02-01-2007, 04:19 PM
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FRANCE! You're next.....
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You like them seventeen candles? *chuckles softly*
It would seem my battle tide is turning and I am getting postive feedback haha... Thank you for your opinions!! You are of great help. I have worked hard to change the first nine paragraphs starts... *whispers* It now reads S *paragraph 1* E *paragraph 2* V *paragraph 3* E *paragraph 4* N *paragraph 5* T *paragraph 6* E *paragraph 7* E *paragraph 8* N *paragraph 9* *whispers* |
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02-01-2007, 04:41 PM
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FRANCE! You're next.....
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Our secret.. Don't tell anyone else
Been working on it all day long that first paragraph been chopped and changed to the best I could going on what you said about clouds wind rain land clouds rain clouds wind land clouds.... Thanks for that... It for sure reads a hell of alot better..*gives 'props'* Then I decided to show it to three people on MSN... and well, I got three positive feedbacks.. And one is a magazine journalist and I feared the worst lol. |
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02-01-2007, 04:54 PM
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at peace
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More than one pro, maybe? The magazine journalist along with yourself??
 I have done some freelance editing for different kinds of writers, and I find the ones who have already been published are usually more difficult to please. So it makes me happy when someone likes the results of my suggestions. Oh, by the way--I forgot to tell you that the hot chocolate had whipped cream, semi-sweet choco-curlys, grated coffee bean, and a cinnamon sipper. Yum. InPeace, InLove |
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02-01-2007, 04:55 PM
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FRANCE! You're next.....
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That sounds a tasty drink! --edit-- Me? Pro? lol.. Perhaps one day. |
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